Tuesday, September 21, 2010

REVISED, REVISED PITCH

This is a story about betrayal and redemption. It is a story about humanity, and the struggle to maintain our own humanity while dealing with the things we've done. This is a story about violence, and the toll that it takes on the hearts of Man.

1 comment:

  1. "struggle to maintain our own humanity while dealing with the things we've done."

    I feel like that sentence could be revised to something like : "struggle to maintain our own humanity while dealing with the consequences of what we've done."

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